Thursday, October 14, 2010

Cracked Open
The day I watched Forest Gump is the day I lost half my brain. Not really. Nothing that dramatic, but the first day I ever watched Forest Gump is the day I cracked my head open. My mother and I had just gotten done watching that movie when my neighbor, Sutton, came over. We always caused some kind of mischief whenever we were together. It was rather dark out so mother insisted we stay in. First we started in the kitchen, just being obnoxious, playing a little, ridiculous game of tag. Neither of us took the games we played as serious as this one. Like all moms, my mom did not allow running in the house but behind her back me and Sutton started chasing one another and next thing you know it I’ m scrunched up, hiding under my Moms end table. Sutton tells me “I’m gonna get you!”
“You wanna bet?” I say retaliating.
“You better look out, I see you under that table!”
“Shoot…”
And as I scream on the top of my lungs, I see him sprinting to the table. I scramble to get out of there as fast as lightning. To my disbelief, I go to free myself from this table and as soon as I put my hand down it simply lands on the cord and pulls this heavy lamp onto my head. At first, everything was dark. I hear Sutton screaming “help!” As he’s screaming like he had just witnessed a killing, my mother comes sprinting downstairs. I feel blood trickle down the back of my head. “What’s going on?” is what I think to myself. My mom rushes me up to the bathroom and puts my head under the faucet to rinse it off with cold water. I had to go to the hospital and have stitches in the back of my head. I still have a noticeable scar on the back of my head but when I see it, I will never forget the first time I watched Forest Gump.

8 comments:

  1. Wow,that is one way to remember an awesome movie.
    I really liked the first sentence because it got my attention really quick and i was curious to find out how this happened.

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  2. Hi, my name is Amanda. I really like your story. I think your writing is at its best in the last paragraph because you use a lot of figurative language. The last paragraph has enough details to paint a picture in my mind and I can imagine exactly what is going on. I also like that you added a bit of humor to your story by referring your incident to a movie you had watched earlier.

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  3. At first I thought this was going to be about Forrest Gump. I really liked how you incorporated Forrest Gump to you going to the hospital it was unexpected.

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  4. Well Forrest Gump is actually my favorite movie and I really like the part where you were leading up to what happen before the lamp hit you and it also kept my attention and wanted me to read on more.

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  5. Hmm next time when you watch Forest Gump, make sure you don't play tag again. but anyways I think the first and second sentence is the best because it graps the readers attention.

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  6. Alexis i know exactly how you feel!!! I have craked open my head two times i my experience sounds almost exactly like yours. It happened different ways but my reaction was the same. I love how you lead us in with Forrest Gump and end the story the same way, you had awesome dialogue, and your story had really good rhythm.

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  7. What a trip! Almost too descriptive. I see too much

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  8. Hey Alexis, for as hard as you hit your head your recollection of this story is pretty suprising. I especially liked your writing at the beginning of the story, because i felt immersed into the story. Your use of detail, quotes, and just enough information creates a great balance for a short story.

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